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Plastic bags, plactic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environment? What can be done by governments and individuals to solve this problem?

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Our planet’s health is deteriorating at an alarming rate and
plastic
 products’ contribution to it is not hidden from anyone. In the following paragraphs, we will discuss the harm it does to nature and what should be done by everyone to fix
this
 issue.
Plastic
 products are damaging our society in every way possible. To illustrate, many cities in the world are not able to recycle these bags and bottles, which has led to a pile of
plastic
waste
.
For instance
, a survey suggests that Mumbai is the most polluted city in the world and its
plastic
waste
 is the major reason for it which is thrown into the sea.
However
,
plastic
waste
 does not decompose easily
that
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 affects
the
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marine life. Now we have hundreds of metric tons of
waste
 in the water, and it may take centuries to decay. It is every
individuals’
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 responsibility to make our surroundings clean and
plastic free
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. We can start not using all products where
plastic
 is being used.
Moreover
, we should teach our children
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how it affects our present, and future generations. Governing bodies should introduce subjects related to saving the environment to
school
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 curriculum and make them mandatory.
Additionally
, local administration should start initiatives to make their citizen aware of
this
 problem as older generations do not take it seriously.
Also
, they should take serious
actions
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on
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 people who are producing or using these kinds of products.
To conclude
, we are polluting
earth
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from
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 many centuries with
plastic
 bags, bottles, and
plastic
 packaging, and it has done enough damage to our world, but we still have time to save it. Governments should take it as a serious threat to
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society, and we should help them as individuals.
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