The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided diagram gives information about the plan for a new supermarket construction in the future of a
town
named
Garlsdon
with two potential locations. The main difference between the two sites is that S1 is outside the
town
,
whereas
S2 is in the
town
centre. These sites can
also
be compared in terms of access by road or rail, and their positions toward three smaller towns. The S1 option is the supermarket will be constructed in the countryside area to the northwest of
Garlsdon
, but it is close to the residential
town
. Meanwhile, the S2 option is
also
close to the housing area, which surrounds the
town
centre. There are main roads from Hindon, Bransdon, and Cransdon to
Garlsdon
town
centre, but
this
is a no-traffic zone, so it would be unable to access S2 by any vehicle.
In contrast
, S1 lies on the main road to Hindon, but it would be more difficult to access
this
place from Bransdon and Cransdon.
Finally
, both S1 and S2 options are close to the railway that runs through
Garlsdon
from Hindon to Cransdon.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • map
  • town
  • supermarket
  • site
  • overview
  • possible
  • transportation
  • access
  • surrounding
  • facilities
  • population
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