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You stayed at your friend’s house when you attended a conference in Australia. Unfortunately, you left a large envelope with some important documents in your room. Write a letter to your friend. In the letter: •thank your friend for the stay •describe where you left the envelope •ask him/her to return it to you by post

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Dear Jhon, I'
m
 writing to tell you that, I safely returned to my
home
 country and I'
m
 safe and sound. First of all, I want to properly thank you for the hospitality that you gave me. I'
m
 sorry that I had to rush back
home
 to attend my graduation. Kindly, give my regards to your mom, because her cooking is very delicious and it felt like I never left my
home
. I want to forward my gratitude to you for being my tour guide. Since I was in a hurry to come back
home
, I mistakenly left one of my important envelopes at your house. I kept it inside the nightstand drawer in your guest room. It's easily recognisable and the envelope contains my
finals
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 year university payment proof. As one final favour, I want you to airmail the document to me. I will bear the cost from my end and you don't have to worry about anything. I'
m
 looking forward to
a
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 next visit
in
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 your country. Sincerely, Devin
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task response
Ensure to address all specific points mentioned in the prompt clearly
coherence and cohesion
Improve the coherence and cohesion by organizing the ideas more effectively
task response
Expresses gratitude and thanks effectively
task response
Provides clear details about the location of the envelope

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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