Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football, while other people think that taking part in individual sports, like tennis or swimming, is better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Sports
have come to a human as a hobby or a career long before we implemented hygiene in our day to day
life. By now there are many Add a hyphen
day-to-day
sports
differentiating in places it is played, instruments used or weather to play in. The most crucial factor would be if the activity could be done in groups or alone. For many people
it is an important factor to consider. Some are more keen on participating without being in a team and Add a comma
,people
others
can not play others
. In this
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I will name the main advantages Add a comma
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to
both.
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of
First,
sports
, which are done in groups, help a person
to build trust in others
. Gaining trust is needed not only between friends,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
very important in the workplace. It shows us that only we could do the work, but others
can do it too and by having more than one person
on the job the goal could be achieved faster and have higher quality results. Another advantage of group
sports
is that people
tend to do better and reach greater goals rather than doing something alone. I have been a member of a dance group
for 6 years, from this
I have learned that I will not try as hard or do as much compared to the time when I was training with other people
on the same moves. In other words
, doing the same tasks and seeing others
do it
and complete Correct pronoun usage
them
it
gives Correct pronoun usage
them
motivation
to exceed your limits and in the long Change the article
the motivation
run
achieve more.
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,run
On the other hand
, training as an individual is great too. One of the advantages of non
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non-group
group
sports
could be that you have much more space to see your weaknesses and address them in order to improve. This
lets a person
to
spot even the tiniest weak points faster than in Change the verb form
apply
the
Correct article usage
a
group
of people
. Furthermore
, the faster the obstacles are seen the sooner it
can be dealt with and moved on to training. Correct pronoun usage
they
Next
point to mention is that doing something in a Correct article usage
The next
group
could mean great motivation for one and great
burden for another. Correct article usage
a great
In other words
, a person
who learns quicker than others
could accomplish less than working alone, because of the wasted time while
waiting for others
to catch up. Training in non
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non-group
group
sports
could let a person
shine in their sphere.
In conclusion, team sports
can help a person
to trust others
more and build motivation to accomplish more. And the non
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non-group
group
sports
will be beneficial in obstacle addressment
and achieving moreCorrect your spelling
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addressed
,
because a Remove the comma
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person
will not be wasting time in
waiting for teammates to catch up.Change preposition
apply
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