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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart below
illustrate
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 the world illiteracy rates divided by gender and six
region
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regions
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 ( South
Asia
, Arab States, Sub-Saharan Africa, East
Asia
 / Oceania, Latin American/ Caribbean and Developed
Countries
). Looking from an
overall
 perspective, it is readily apparent in South
Asia
, Arab States and Sub - Saharan Africa, the
percentage
 of
women
 illiterate
are
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is
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 greater in comparison with the
percentage
 of men.
Wich
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,
unfortunately
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 means that according
with
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 the table
last
year
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,year
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 we had a huge
percentage
 of
women
of
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in
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 the
countries
 mentioned below that do not know how to write or read.
As
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example
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,example
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 in South
Asia
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,Asia
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 more than 55
percentage
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percent
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 of
female
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females
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 are not literate.
As
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In
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 opposite scenarios we had the Developed
Countries
that
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where
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 the rate of illiteracy
in
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generally is lower,
however
, the
percentage
 of illiterate
women
 continued to be significantly higher in comparison with the
percentage
 of
the
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men.
Nevertheless
,
Latin
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in Latin
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American
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America
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/ Caribbean and East
Asia
/ Oceania, the numbers of illiterate individuals were considerable , and the scenarios
was
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 the same as the
others
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countries
, the rates of illiteracy
was
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were
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 superior in
women
 compared to men.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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