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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driver less. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be. Passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

Advancing technologies foster a possible future for
autopilot
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 vehicles nowadays. Despite some concerns regarding the safety hazards
as well as
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 the increase in the unemployment rate, I am in favour of driverless transportation
due to
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 its advantages for societies and individuals.
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 with, the opponents argue that
such
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 developments will reduce job opportunities,
including
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as
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 the MRT systems in Singapore are mainly controlled by computer programs nowadays, whilst workers play the roles of assistants. On top of that, when encountering emergency situations, the restricted capacity of current technologies could lead to serious incidents.
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google
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Google
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 made various models of driverless vehicles
,
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however
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non
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 of them are ready to be introduced into people's daily life based on several car incidents that happened during trials.
On the other hand
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, others suggest that a wide range of usage of
autopilot
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 vehicles could actually reduce car accidents caused by drunk driving or destruction.
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, in the USA, Elon Musk
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 a tunnel recently for driverless cars, which allows users to lie back in their cars on the way to their destination.
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,
autopilot
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 applied on public transportation could provide 24-hour services without worry for the negative impacts derived from employees who work long-hour shifts. It could not only reduce the costs of running fees for institutions, but
ensure
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also ensure
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 safety for passengers. To summarise, it is inevitable that the application of
autopilot
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 usage growing in size will replace human roles in
transport
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the transport
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 industries.
Reversely
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, it deters the hazards caused by human action,
along with
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 it,
enable
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 economic travelling methods.
Therefore
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,
in
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from
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 my perspective, the advantages of trends as
such
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 overweight the disadvantages.

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task
Be clear in the first line. State your view on driverless cars straight away.
coherence
Use simple links to show how ideas connect, like 'first', 'also', 'but', 'so'.
content
Give one or two strong points and back them with easy examples.
grammar
Check grammar and punctuation; write short sentences that are easy to read.
structure
Put the writing in four parts: intro, two body parts, and a short end.
content
Your view on driverless cars is easy to see in the text.
content
You use examples to show ideas.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Driverless technology
  • Traffic efficiency
  • Cybersecurity
  • Data privacy
  • Infrastructure
  • Economic impacts
  • Accessibility
  • Social inclusion
  • Emissions
  • Fuel consumption
  • Ethical dilemmas
  • Human error
  • Congestion
  • Independence
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