What are the advantage and disadvantage of leaving your country to live or study abroad

Living or studying abroad
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more popular in many countries.
This
essay will discuss the benefits and drawbacks of
this
trend. On the one hand, leaving the
country
to live or study in an overseas environment has numerous benefits. One of the main advantages of
this
trend is approaching a new
culture
. Living in a totally new
country
, lifestyles and meeting many
people
from other countries may help
people
become open-minded,
more
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active, develop relationships and cross-
culture
understanding.
For example
, a student who learns
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studies can improve their knowledge through new friends they meet at school or the workplace.
That is
a good opportunity to broaden their horizons
besides
theories of the subject. Another factor can be that living in developed countries where the society, the economy,
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technology are developed can be beneficial. All of that supports
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quality of life.
On the other hand
, living or studying abroad may have certain disadvantages that
people
should take into consideration. There are always two sides to living in
new
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culture
,
although
that is
a good opportunity
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people
may feel disappointed because of
culture
shock.
For example
, my sister living in overseas. Getting up at 7 am and having breakfast is her daily routine, but in a new
country
, markets and restaurants are always open after 9 am so she seems cannot find a meal for breakfast, except for some fast food stores open 24/7. Another negative effect is that living or studying in a new environment can cause psychological problems. Barriers to speaking new languages are the reason
people
cannot connect with friends when they need help, there are no friends, or family members to support make them feel alone. In conclusion, leaving the
country
to live or study could bring about certain benefits, but it is negative consequences should not be overlooked.
People
should have well-prepared knowledge and skills when making decisions.
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task achievement
The essay provides a complete and clear response to the topic. Ensure that each advantage and disadvantage is fully explored and addressed in detail.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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