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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate at fast-food shops between 2003 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate at fast-food shops between 2003 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart portrays the percentage of Americans who ate at fast-
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 restaurants in two years.
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, the frequency of
people
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 who ate fast
food
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 fluctuated over three different years. The highest in 2003 and 2006 was once a week, and in 2013 was once or twice a month.
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 with,
people
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 who ate junk
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 every day in 2003 was 4% but experienced stable in 2005 and 2013 at 3%. Americans who ate fast
food
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 several times a week experienced fluctuating. In 2003 the percentage was 17%, which increased to 20% in 2006 before falling to 16% in 2013. Time table once a week was one of the higher numbers of
people
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 who consumed junk
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, in 2003 was 31%, rose to 33% in 2006 and declined to 28% in 2013. Once or twice a month
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 had a higher number in three different years. In 2003 the proportion was 30%, fell to 25% in 2003 and increased to 33% in 2013.
People
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 who consumed a few times a year in 2003 was 13% and was stable in 2006 and 2013. Interestingly, Americans who never ate fast
food
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 in 20013 was 5% and stable in 2006 and 2013 at 3%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
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