Some people think we should stop building library because it waste of governments revenue. What extant do you agree

More and more
people
want to own items
such
as
car
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cars
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, clothing and other things, that are made by famous brands. I guess,
this
is happening for several reasons. Some of them really like these things: clothes seem perfect,
cars
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and cars
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are useful and comfortable.
However
, unfortunately, nowadays a lot of
people
think that expensive, trendy clothes can help them become more popular. They try to look more successful.
Also
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someone believes that if they look rich, they will have a lot of friends. Of course, you collect a lot of
people
around you, but I’m not sure that they will be real friends. I don’t think that it is good. When
people
hiding
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under expensive things, they can forget the real values like kindness, honesty, loyalty and empathy.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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