IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

Write about the following topic: Should private schools receive government funding? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#topic #schools #government
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Education
 plays an important and significant role in the development of any country. Government, private sectors, and NGOs all contribute to providing a high standard of schooling to the masses.
However
, it is largely argued that either the authority should provide some financial aid to private institutions or not.
This
 essays strongly disagree with the statement for releasing fund for the private sector
education
 system. First and foremost, the private sector receives heavy monthly fees,
therefore
 it is their core responsibility to provide better schooling.
In addition
, except for a few, they are well equipped with all sorts of facilities including a laboratory, computer centre, and playgrounds.
In contrast
, the authority
education
 facilities are in an appalling condition,
therefore
 in
such
 a scenario, the need of the hour is the upgrade the infrastructure of the government schools.
Furthermore
, authority schooling lacks quality discipline
as well as
 experienced and qualified teachers as well.
Nevertheless
, a large number of pupils enrolled in government schools belong to less privileged areas and communities.
In addition
, the state must arrange a monthly stipend for the students in order to encourage them to study
as well as
 fulfil their basic needs.
Furthermore
, efforts can be made to offer some sort of skills to the desiring student, so they can support their families, and don't have to leave their learning for the sake of work.
For instance
, the Hunar Foundation in Pakistan
along with
 providing top-notch literacy facilities
also
 provides skills in stitching, and designing to women. In a nutshell, the state must take each and every step to support and upgrade the level of schooling for their future generation irrespective of the
education
 provider.
However
, a sustainable approach, concrete efforts, and dedication are required to uplift the standard of schooling in state schools
Submitted by ahmed.22waqas on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: