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The line graph illustrates the number of parcels delivered by two major companies over 80 years, between 1920 and 2000.

The line graph illustrates the number of parcels delivered by two major companies over 80 years, between 1920 and 2000.
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The line graph illustrates the number of
parcels
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 delivered by two major companies over 80 years, between 1920 and 2000.
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, the numbers of
parcels
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 of the two companies differentiated each other, at which the beginning of FedEx was outstanding but the numbers decreased significantly
at the end
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 of the period. Having shown on the bottom, TNT mushroomed. FedEx started at 15000 in 1920 and it increased considerably to about 25000 until 1940. Having plunged to 13000 in the next year, there was a fall marginally to 12000 in 1960. Fortunately, the number of
parcels
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 increased to 18000 by 1980. After, that there was stability until the end of the period. When it comes to TNT, the rate started at over 5000 at the beginning of the period, and
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 the number of
parcels
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 grew to over 10000 until 1960. There was a fluctuation until 1980, at which point delivery numbers skyrocketed to 23000 in the next year. In 2000, it showed development to approximately 25000.

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