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Children are facing more pressure nowadays from academic social and commercial perspective.What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to refuse these pressures?

#children #pressure #perspective #pressures #measures
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these days
children
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pressures like educational communal and commercial.
This
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 disturbing most
children
 nowadays In their
life
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 every child will face
with
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academic difficulties.
Todays
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children
 compete with
children
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is
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 from
global
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 village
instead
 of their
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 or from other town
children
.Parents want their
children
 to be perfect in each area.So most of them send their
children
 to special schools which have school bags even heavier than
child
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a child
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 himself.There are
tutions
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tuitions
 after school times.Because of
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them
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 kids can not get enough time to try other fields
Most
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 countries
children
 especially teens pressurized by pressures like social and commercial.They do not want to involve traditional
things
 so most of the time they are against
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their
parents
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parent's
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 opinions.
This
 kind of
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lead
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more
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 and more stress.And there are problems with their peers.
That is
 good if they are kind and smart but if they are
bully
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 they will destroy our
children
's life.Because they see many
children
 like them have modern technology like computers and mobile phones.
Then
 they
also
 want to get it.But you know not every family have good financial positioning
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 some of them can not get what their kids want.
Therefore
 most of them put themselves into depression If they can not buy these
things
.
Children
 should not let these kind of challenges
to
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destroy their innocent childhood.Every child in the world
deserve
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 the best
things
.We should help them find themselves in any way.Or else these pressures will demolish their physical and mental growth. (281 words)
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