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Some parents believe that learning mathematics at school is redundant and should not be taught while others believe that if should remain a foundational subject whether or not it is used later in life.

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 growing number of parents are of the view that learning
mathematics
 in various academic institutions should not be encouraged since it does not benefit the child in any way .
This
 is because the skill gained from
this
 subject is now done seamlessly by electronic gadgets,
such
 as simple calculators, mobile phones and computers.In spite of the fact that
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having a good knowledge of
mathematics
 is not a prerequisite for most jobs when children complete their studies.
On the other hand
,other parents argue that all children should be taught
mathematics
 regardless of its use when they become adults. Teaching
mathematics
 pupils to solve problems in trigonometry, matrices and many others stimulates the young minds to think outside their comfort zone. In conclusion, the role of
mathematics
 in education today continues to be arguable.
Although
 some parents believe it is not essential and should be omitted from school programs. I think it increases students' intelligence and helps us identify their strengths.
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