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The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is believed that working days need to be reduced and employees should take a longer weekend. In
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 statement.   First and foremost, people can concentrate more on their
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 when their
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 are more prolonged to have more refreshments. When people spend more time with their loved ones on
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, they will feel content, giving them a confidence boost.
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, Saigon Tourist is offering a program that runs four workdays a week.
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, employees must take a break to concentrate on
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 fully. They can
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 make it better for themselves psychologically and physically.
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 of the program, there were significant improvements in the company's profit and employee satisfaction.
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, more extended
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 could increase their productivity
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.
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, people's everyday
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 will suffer, and they will become stressed out if they take longer
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.
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, in Vietnam, university students studied the importance of mental health workers, and many individuals are affected by stress. After learning about the importance of mental health, I knew more about how to improve my
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 quality at home.   In conclusion,
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 a longer weekend could lead to positive improvements in
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 and stress levels, the benefits of longer breaks,
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 as the opportunity to engage in
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 activities and the potential to enhance mental health, far outweigh the disadvantages.
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, I firmly believe that shorter working days could be a step towards a healthier, more balanced
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-life.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • productivity
  • burnout
  • motivation
  • mental well-being
  • work-life balance
  • job satisfaction
  • pollution levels
  • traffic congestion
  • consumer spending
  • economic implications
  • leisure and service sectors
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