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Write about the following topic. In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a c Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is argued that a few
people
 are well-paid in some of the
countries
. Others think that it is beneficial for the
country
,
however
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 some
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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people
 claim that authorities ought not to permit salaries high
amount
 of
money
. I am completely certain that
every one
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everyone
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 should be paid for their own tasks. In
this
 essay, I will discuss why
a
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apply
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small individuals earn a large
amount
 of
money
 in some of the companies and provide relevant examples for my own knowledge. Nowadays, numerous
people
 work everywhere in order to earn over the world.
Peope
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People
 in some
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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countries
 do not earn a large
amount
 of
money
 so as to be beneficial for their
countries
.
However
 many of the
countries
 pay extremely a higher salary to their mass
people
. First of all,
people
 in
the
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countries
where
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that
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 pay well do not find it difficult to live.
Secondly
, if
government
 pays
people
 enough
amount
 of
money
,
this
country
 is rich and powerful.
Lastly
, Its population do not have trouble because of getting
much
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a lot of
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money
.
In
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On
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other
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the other
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 hand, when
majority
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the majority
a majority
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 of the
people
 in
country
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the country
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 are getting a little
amount
 of
money
this
 position is never useful for
government
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the government
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. It causes many difficulties
to
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for
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people
 and
government
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the government
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 in the
country
 where pay a small
amount
 of
money
.
For instance
, American citizens get enough
money
 for their own job.
Therefore
 they achieve their ultimate goals
due to
good
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a good
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 salary.
Moreover
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,Moreover
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 it impacts the economy of the
country
 fairly In conclusion, a majority of the
people
 are not paid well and it is not good for the
country
.
Government
 should pay
people
 enough
money
 for their own tasks. I have tried to
anwer
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answer
 correctly and provided relevant examples from my experience.
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