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In several countries around the world, students take a year off between high school and university in order to travel, work or volunteer. However, in most countries, students go straight to university after graduating. Discuss both approaches and give your opinion about which is better.

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These days in many
countries
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, pupils take off a
year
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 before starting a
university
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education
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 to explore and
work
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.
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 in most
countries
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, they start their higher
education
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 at
university
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 right after schooling. In
this
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 essay, These paths benefit
students
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 because the first one allows you to find the stream that interests you most and gain valuable experience. At the same
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, the latter point offers you to follow your goal without
further
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 due. In my view, I think that a
year
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 off before starting
further
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education
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 is better because it allows you to learn, earn and become a mature individual. In almost all Asian
countries
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,
students
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 do not take a
year
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 off between their schooling and
university
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education
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 because of the
education
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 systems they are surrounded by, and they have fixed goals that they want to pursue in their tertiary
education
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. In India,
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, almost all undergraduates are already aware of what they will study after schooling, which is why they do not waste a lot of
time
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 before entering into Bachelor's or Master's degrees.
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 helps them accomplish their graduation earlier.
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, I believe it is better to have a gap between thinking, learning and gaining valuable experience, making them
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 wise
students
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. In many Western
countries
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, most high school
students
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 do not go to
university
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 right after their schooling. They travel to different places to figure out the interest stream they want to pursue. They
also
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work
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 at restaurants or Charitable trusts to gain valuable experiences and learn other things. Some people
also
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work
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 for money to support themselves with tuition fees. In Canada, it is obvious to see native adolescents working at Macdonalds and restaurants. They are
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 seen doing volunteering
work
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, like collecting donations for Child Care Trust in public places.
This
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 teaches us communication skills and makes us
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 responsible individuals. Taking a
year
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 off allows
students
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 to explore and find their talents,
besides
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 getting valuable
work
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 experience. In conclusion, a
year
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 off before a
university
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education
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 allows
students
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 to travel and
work
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 to find their hidden talents.
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, without taking a
year
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 off,
students
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 can save
time
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 to complete their
university
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 degrees earlier. Taking
time
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 before pursuing higher
education
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 is crucial to finding our interests and skills.
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