In the past, lectures were the traditional method of teaching large numbers of students. Nowadays, new technology is increasingly being used to teach students. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this new approach?

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Humans live in a digital age where education is in the progress of applying cutting-edge
technology
to teach students. It is undeniable that each educational method has its advantages and disadvantages, so in
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I will represent those of
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new teaching
technology
. From the positive perspective, there are many reasons why advent
technology
should be exposed in education.
Firstly
, nowadays the world is only more reliant on AI and digital tools so
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knowledge and skills about technologies are really necessary for students. Since
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the earlier they approach new modern devices, the more opportunities they would get in the future in both educational and professional careers.
Secondly
, students at
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present are familiar with using tablets, laptops or computers since they have
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applications, platforms and social networks which could bring excitement and fun.
As a result
, technological devices might be attributed to
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attention in the classrooms.
On the other hand
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very new
technology
to education seems to be problematic as well, especially for youngsters.
Firstly
, children can access
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some
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inappropriate
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such
as sexual, violent,
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… which can harm their
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health and make them do the same actions to that
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.
Additionally
, some organizations may take advantage of websites on the internet to build many links in order to deceive young adults for their own purposes.
Last
but not least, many games and applications limit the creativity and
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skills of people. The more children rely on the answers and products made by AI or found
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the internet, the more passive they would be when they grow up. In conclusion,
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technology
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has benefits that no one can deny, especially in the educational field.
However
, people should be careful when using it and parents and teachers should manage the time and contents that children can approach.
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