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Some experts believe that it's better to begin learning a foreigh language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Some scholars believe that studying a foreign
language
 earlier in elementary school will be better than in middle school.
This
 early-
language
 study, I personally believe, would give more benefits that I will outline in my essay. Regarding the advantages, learning languages in childhood will be easier to be understood by children as they have a golden age in the period of primary
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.
In addition
, students can
also
 learn basic
language
 starting from their elementary study. Younger age is usually
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 period to learn something new including languages. The second advantage which could be found in the early-
language
 study is that it can be a
children
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 habit to speak in
other
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another language
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language
. These second
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 would be in
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 similar position with their mother tongue.
In other words
, they could learn from the basic implying in a faster understanding.
However
, we should not ignore
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 drawbacks that
this
 earlier
language
-related learning may bring about.
Firstly
, kids would not focus on their primary
language
, which would lead to
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language
.
Moreover
, if the foreign
language
 was not thought well, it would affect
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 speech delay
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 enforcement of understanding various
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 at the same time. Some researchers said that learning more than one
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childhood with less knowledge from their teacher would result in
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speech disorders.
Accordingly
, some people do not suggest
this
 learning model. In conclusion,
while
this
 issue seems disadvantageous to some
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, I would argue that the benefits that early
language
 learning may lead to are more significant.
This
 is provided that it has to be learnt
appropiately
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.
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