Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reasons for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages?

People
tend to settle down in another farther
city
or country when grow up nowadays, but some do not like to do so. They,
in contrast
, choose to live in a place close to their hometown.
This
essay will outline some of the reasons
as well as
what I consider to be the advantages and disadvantages. Seeking a similar environment to their own home may be the main reason for
people
to spend time living in a close-distant
city
. They may fear being a failure
while
living in a far place where they do not have any relatives, friends or the same atmosphere. Living nearer can
also
allow them to visit their parents and hang around with friends regularly
while
there is not much impact on their daily
life
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. Needless to say, there are some benefits of living near home.
One
is the strong social network that they have built since they were small. They can get support from it in terms of emotional, financial and business issues.
For example
, when
people
need to deal with the local office to have the paperwork done within 2 days, but the process requires 3 days,
then
at
this
point, their relationship may help to boost the procedure quicker. Another
one
is that they do not need to feel insecure about life. Living in the same
city
, they may have all the basic things
such
as a house and a car. All they need to do is
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work a 9-to-5 shift daily and spend the rest of their time with their family. Despite its advantages, several drawbacks are outlined too. First of all, it is a job opportunity. Living in a small
city
may provide a limited number of jobs. Indeed, there are not many chances for them to change and
thus
their income may
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lesser than
people
who seek
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opportunity
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in a different
city
.
Moreover
, when they are dealing with routine jobs and tasks, their mindsets are not broadened either. Take
one
visa company in Beijing for an example. When they deal with only a group of Japanese customers,
then
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they assume that Vietnamese customers can travel to Hong Kong without a visa as the Japanese do, resulting in them being set for illegal migration
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at Hong Kong
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port. In conclusion, living where
people
were born good or bad depends on each person's perspective.
However
, I still believe that it is better to experience some places different from
one
's own home to broaden horizons and have better job opportunities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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