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The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with data opened, kilometers of route and passenger numbers per year in millions.

The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with data opened, kilometers of route and passenger numbers per year in millions.
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The table illustrates the detail about
metro
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the metro
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 system operated in six cities
regardling
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regarding
 three features, namely, starting year,
route
 length and annual passenger number.
Overall
, the railways which began
its
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their
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 operation before the
mid 20th
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mid-20th
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 century
incline
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 to have relatively long lanes and large amounts of users per year compared to the others.
To begin
 with, it is remarkable that the subway in London which is the oldest among the given cities
as
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was
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 constructed in 1863 has the longest
route
 of 394 kilometres.
On the other hand
, another railway in Paris has
similar
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a similar
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 trend since it is the second oldest and longest with
the
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its
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opend
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opening
 date in 1900 and
199
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is 199
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kilometres'
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kilometres
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 lane.
Although
 both of these
metro
 have plenty
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of passenger
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passenger
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passengers
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, 775
million
 and 1191
million
 people for London and Paris respectively, the astonishing number in
this
 category can be seen in the data of Tokyo, standing at 1927
million
. In the city,
underground
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an underground
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 train service
commerced
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was commerced
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 in 1927 with 155
kilometre
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kilometres
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 of its
route
. As for
Wasington
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Washington
 DC,
this
 city opened
metro
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the metro
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 system in 1976 and bring 144
million
 travellers
annualy
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annually
 on the
route
 whose length is 126
kilimitres
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kilometres
. a half
og
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of
 the decade after the construction of
this
 railway, Kyoto started its
metro
 service with the shortest
route
 compared to others, which is 11
kilimetres
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kilometres
.
Similarly
, Los Angeles has only 28
kilomiteres
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kilometres
 lane built in 2001 and these metros help between 45 and 50
million
 people to travel in a year.
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