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The map below shows the development of the village of Reymouth between 1995 and present.

The map below shows the development of the village of Reymouth between 1995 and present.
#development #village #reymouth
The two maps illustrate the developments from 1995 to
present
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the present
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of
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in
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 Ryemouth.
Overall
, some new
intrasturctres
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infrastructures
 has been built and changed
such
 as housing, tennis courts,
restaurnats
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restaurants
, car park and apartments.
To begin
 in 1995, there were 8 houses
alongwith
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along with
 the road and 4 homes were located together near the road. Farmland was placed
the
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in the
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 northeast corner of the map with
large
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a large
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froest
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forest
partk
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park
part
. Shops were situated
oppsite
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opposite
 site of
fish
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the fish
a fish
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 market and
hotel
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the hotel
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 was
in
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apply
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the
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apply
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across
of
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from
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 the shop and opposite
site
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the site
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 of
cafe
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the cafe
a cafe
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.
In addition
, in the middle of
sea
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the sea
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, there were fishing ports.
In contrast
, at present, there are many changes. The number of houses
are
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is
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 increased, and the road is
extened
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extended
 to
west
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the west
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.
Also
, the site of farmland and forest park
altered
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was altered
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to
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into
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golf
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a golf
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 place and inside it, there are tennis courts.
Also
, a parking lot is added nearby a hotel and shops are changed to restaurants. Plus, apartments are constructed on the
sopts
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spots
 of old fish markets. Fishing ports are diminished now.
However
, only a cafe has been maintaining its place
from
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since
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 1995.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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