Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good for the world of sports, while others think there are disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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There is a controversial perspective: heating up a debate over sponsoring
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an effective method to spread companies’ reputation.
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some hold a strong view that it is beneficial for
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world
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, the opposite claim that it can bring drawbacks for
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the latter is valid to some extent, I would consider myself a supporter of the former. For a long time, the investment in promoting the image of the enterprise has taken place as a common sight. By doing so, not only brands can make
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do good to the
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or campaign, especially
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promotion. Organizing a
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requires a lot of money, without the sponsorship from the brands the
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will not be possible.
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, coca has been the official sponsor of the
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cup since 1978 in order to help football enthusiasts enjoy
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professional
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, sponsoring
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brings a myriad of beneficial impacts on the
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world
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the advantage of sponsoring
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sports
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is widely acknowledged, its drawback still
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. Some companies have relied on sponsoring large
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programs, which have huge viewership, with a view to promoting products or services that adversely affect consumers.
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, Bia Sai Gon, one of the biggest beer producers in VietNam, sponsored
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Leicester
and attracted a large number of fans of the club thereby motivating them to use products that are harmful to health.
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, sponsoring will cause some demerits for
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of
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harmful in some respects, sponsorship is still one of the effective ways to help the
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sports’
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world
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