Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than complete become more successful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions.

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People have different views about whether adolescents should be taught to be competitive or cooperative.

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a spirit of competition can sometimes be useful in life, I believe that the ability to co-operate is more important. On the one hand, competition can be a great source of motivation for younger students. When teachers use games or prizes to introduce an element of competitiveness into lessons, it can encourage the primary students to work harder to outdo the other pupils in the class.

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kind of healthy rivalry may help to build their self-confidence

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pushing them to work independently and progress more quickly. When these children leave school, their confidence and determination will help them in competitive situations

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as job interviews. It can

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be argued that competition should be encouraged in order to prepare children better for their future life. There are many reasons why I support the proposal that we should teach our younger pupils to be cooperative.

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practice/attempt enables us to learn from each other. In

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way, we would have higher efficiency and quality of production.

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, the attempt can help foster confidence among schollers. Having

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confidence and determination would enable them to cooperate in complex workplaces.

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, when they enter society, they will face challenges that require them to work together. If they lack the ability to cooperate, they will be defeated in a fierce environment. In conclusion, I can understand the reason why individuals tip the balance in favour of teaching students to compete, I would argue that they can benefit more from cooperation.

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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than complete become more successful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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It is common aspiration among many young peopleto run their own business, rather than work for an employer. Do you think the advantages of working for yourself outweigh the drawbacks?

Some students prefer to take a gap year between high school and university, to work or travel. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people say that supermarkets and manufacturers have a responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging on products they sell. Others believe that it is the consumer’s responsibility to avoid buying products which have a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment. What are the causes of this? What can be done to solve this problem?