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Some people think that work is the most important thing of people’s life. Without the success of career, life become meaningless. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, some
people
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 think that
work
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 is the priority of human
life
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.
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, a successful career is
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 a measure to evaluate a person. In my opinion, I disagree with
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 statement because we should not ignore other aspects of our
life
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. First of all, it cannot deny that career plays a significant role in
people
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 and society. When
people
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 have a job, they can earn money to cover their basic needs
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 as accommodation, food and education.
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, with a well-paid job, they can live more comfortably and improve their living standards in both mental and physical aspects.
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,
work
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 is not the most important thing
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 one's
life
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. More specifically, many
people
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 have brilliant careers, but they are still not happy. Because they spend most of their
time
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 at
work
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 and even frequently do overtime or
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weekend shifts.
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 prevents them from having
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 to enjoy
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, I believe that health and family are more important than
work
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.
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, a person with a well-paid job cannot enjoy a meaningful
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 if he or she tries to fight illness
everyday
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.
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, my uncle is very successful with his business, he is always under heavy pressure.
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, he
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 does not have
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 for taking care of himself and he suffers from various health problems
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 as heart attack and obesity.
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, if they do not spend their
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 with family, earning more money is not meaningful. As they fail to have quality
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 for having deep conversations and hanging out with each other.
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 could lead to the breakdown of the relationship or even divorce in the worst scenario. In conclusion,
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work
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 plays an important role in human
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, I believe that family and healthy should be the priority of
people
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.
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