Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than other people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think It is unfair. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Some people opine that
sports
professionals should get a high salary, while
others think it is unfair for other important professions
. Although
sports
professional deserves to be paid high salaries because they are qualified and have trained more than amateurs, I believe they do not deserve such
salary
since they have less contribution to society than important Correct article usage
a salary
profession
Replace the word
professionals
has
.
Unnecessary verb
apply
Sports
competitions become successful because of Professional athletes
who have a
great qualifications and better Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
skill
than the common Fix the agreement mistake
skills
athletes
. They deserve to get a great deal money
as they have been trained at a higher level than normal Change preposition
of money
athletes
. Moreover
, it is not easy to be professional since they have to pass at
some hard courses to become advanced. Change preposition
apply
For example
, Cristiano Ronaldo, the highest-paid football player, raises 173 pound
sterling, because of Add a hyphen
173-pound
the
extraordinary qualification and experience from him in football.
Change the word
their
his
her
On the other hand
, important professions
deserve to obtain higher income than professional Replace the word
professionals
athletes
since they contribute directly and give the
advantage impact Correct article usage
an
to
Change preposition
apply
the
society. Correct article usage
apply
Furthermore
, people who take the
important Correct article usage
apply
professions
, they
have Correct pronoun usage
apply
a
Correct article usage
apply
motivated
to look after the community. Replace the word
motivation
For instance
, the
doctor who Change preposition
for the
take
care Change the verb form
takes
for
the patients in the hospital, Change preposition
of
the
income is not fair Correct article usage
apply
with
the athlete person.
Change preposition
to
To sum up
, professional athlete
have a great deal Fix the agreement mistake
athletes
money
as they have been trained to play Change preposition
of money
sport
competitions. Meanwhile, in my opinion, important Change the noun form
sports
professions
should receive well-earn wages for the reason that they provide their ability to Replace the word
professionals
the
society than the athlete who only Correct article usage
apply
entertain
the audience Change the verb form
entertains
in
Change preposition
of
sports
enthusiast
.Fix the agreement mistake
enthusiasts
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