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Some people choose private health care centers rather than public service centers what is your opinion?

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These days, in many countries private medical
centres
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 are available, and some people prefer them to public ones. Some even try to avoid them at any cost and do not consider it as an option.
While
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 I do not mind public medical services, I agree with the idea of private utilities. In
this
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 essay, I will support my opinion with examples.
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, time is priceless when someone or their loved ones have serious health issues. To avoid long queues and waiting, people would rather pay money and have a visit and required investigations done as soon as possible.
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, private
centres
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 might give an opportunity to get the diagnosis and treatment sooner rather than later, especially when it is a question of life and death. Another reason I agree with the idea of private medicine is that there is a possibility to get a consultation from a specialist of own choice. There might be professionals with whom it is almost impossible to make an appointment in public
centres
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. What's more, sometimes it is the only chance to get a wishful meeting. It is well known that sometimes people travel abroad to cure a disease, and they do it in commercial facilities. In conclusion,
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 public health establishments are
also
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 important, it is good to have a choice and do it the way it fits. Personally, I think that private
centres
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 are a must and they might provide services that will take too long or are not possible at all in municipal offices.
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