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Homelessness is increasing in many major cities around the world.What do you think are the main causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it?

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It is true that the number of
people
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 in need is increasing dramatically all around the world.In
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 will discuss the main causes of homelessness and solutions to
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 problem. One of the biggest problems is greater population density combined with increased traffic,which pollution,air and noise,
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 stress.
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,many countries are becoming more urbanised as
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 move to cities because of the entertainment and education facilities.
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,city life is considerably less wholesome physically and mentally than generations.To solve
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 problem,the government could be made greener by introducing more green spaces,even if they are only micro-gardens like trees,shrubs and seats.
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 can help to cleaner air and reduce stress. Another issue is during the Pandemic many companies and firms went bankrupt,though,governments were trying to do their best to support local businessmen.
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, many
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 lost their jobs and they couldn't find a new job and were become homeless.The number of qualified
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 is growing but they have nowhere to work.
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, older
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 just can not compete with modern, educated young
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.
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 problem could be addressed by paying day-by-day courses for their older employees and to keep them motivated with some kind of reward after achieving some kind of task. In conclusion,in my ,opinion
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 number of
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 are facing these factors and poverty.
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, we can significantly lessen the issue by motivating and educating them to keep up with
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