Some people think that to get good education one should go abroad, whereas other claim that people can get a good education in their own country as well. Which view do you agree with? Provide specific reason and examples to support your opinion.

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In today’s globalised world studying abroad is getting easier than before. More and more people tend to get

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education in developed countries. Some individuals consider that if

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wants to be

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educated he should go abroad.

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believe that it is better to

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government is interested in more educated citizens in its state.

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, nowadays the young are willing to be

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educated. People who pass the special exams go

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abroad with state line and

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try to find other

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abroad it will be easy

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them to find

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, employees who had

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get

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your horizons and you will learn about different cultures and

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far from your family members.

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, students in our

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usually live with their family and

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their life condition. I mean, they do not think about domestic problems and

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, people who live and

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they often meet cultural

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between cuisine make them uncomfortable.

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living there.

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all above mentioned, the young try to be

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educated for good life and high salary job. Some prefer to

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abroad,

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others

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consider it is better to get high education in

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. I think It does not matter where you

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, the matter is to be

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person for your society.

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Some people think that to get good education one should go abroad, whereas other claim that people can get a good education in their own country as well. Which view do you agree with? Provide specific reason and examples to support your opinion.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

As a part of their education, many students work at a company for a short period of time without a salary. Are there more advantages than disadvantages to this?

Some people think the best way to succeed is to get a university education, while others disagree and say it is no longer true nowadays. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that air travelshould be restricted because it causes serious pollution and up the world's fuel resources. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

These days some people spend a lot of money on tickets to go to sporting or events. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?