Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Freedom of choice is everyone's
nessecity
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necessity
Thus
, few individuals feel that,
small Remove the comma
apply
sitiuations
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situations
such
as food, clothes and entertainment can be taken care by
children Change preposition
of by
themselve
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themselves
while
, others are obligated towards letting their gaurdians
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guardians
to
make a choice for them, as it is a matter of their future. I will discuss both points and write my Fix the infinitive
apply
view point
in looming paragraphs.
Mostly in many Correct your spelling
viewpoint
countries
youngsters are not allowed to make decisions, because it is believed that Add a comma
,countries
child's
early growth should be taken care Correct article usage
a child's
under
their parents so that cannot make mistakes and Change preposition
of under
do
not get into bad habits. To some extent, if any child Unnecessary verb
apply
get
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gets
into
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in
wrong
direction Change the article
the wrong
then
even a small mistake can ruin life
and this
will always impact on
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apply
the
society. Correct article usage
apply
Last
year, one of my friend
get into drug addiction, he got full liberty from his parents Change to a plural noun
friends
due to
which he took wrong
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the wrong
decision
and at small age addicted to drugs, now
his kidney is completely damaged. Correct word choice
and now
Thus
at early
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an early
age
youngsters will never be allowed alone to direct their Add a comma
,age
life
.
However
, youngsters will become more successful and mature if they are allow
to take Change the verb form
are allowed
decision
which actually influence their Fix the agreement mistake
decisions
life
. Hard decisions have always make
a individual much stronger, these steps Wrong verb form
made
teaches
the path to feel for others, Correct subject-verb agreement
teach
respect
everyone and somehow if any person fell into Correct word choice
and respect
wrong
path Change the article
the wrong
then
he will know how to come out from
it. If we look into Change preposition
of
US
children after 16 are allowed to take their own Correct article usage
the US
decision
due to
which more than 90% of the people are successful and satisfied.
All in all, to some extent it is good to avoid young generation from
taking their own Change preposition
to
decision
so that they cannot follow wrong
direction, but I believe it is even more beneficial if Correct article usage
the wrong
youngster
are allowed to make their own path which actually Fix the agreement mistake
youngsters
effect
their Change the verb form
effects
life
due to
which they will become capable to find their passion and become successful.Submitted by pranav10puri on
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