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There have been several complaints about the reception area where visitors to your company arrive. Your manager has asked you to suggest how the reception area could be improved. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter -describe the complaints that have been made - say why the reception area is important - say why the reception area could be improved

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Dear Sir, Hope you are doing well. I am writing
this
 email to give my suggestions to make the reception desk better. Details about
this
is
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 discussed
further
 in the email. As we are getting bad
review
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 about the lobby. Highlight them, most of the complaints are regarding chairs stating they are not comfy enough for
longer
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 waits.
Secondly
, there is no one to assist our
guest
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guests
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 properly. And the
celing
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ceiling
 fans are too slow during the hotter days.
However
, I feel reception is the first
are
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area
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 that our
guest
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 and clients visit and if that area is not maintained it will affect our brand as a marketing agency.
To begin
 with , we can add
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comfortable sofas where visitors can sit and relax.
In addition
, TV can be mounted on the wall as waiting can be boring, so it can keep them entertained.
Moreover
, water dispensers must be added as I personally recommend, during the hot summers it will keep our guests hydrated. Talking about
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assisting our
visitor
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visitors
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 we can plan to add the
the
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self check
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 portal, which will make
easier
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 for us
as well as
 our clients or visitors. Looking forward to
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 changes. Yours sincerely, Stuti Sheth
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