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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Modern technology is creating a single world culture. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

#technology #world #culture #support
One cannot deny that technological
improvings
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improving
 made throughout
last
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the last
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 centuries have considerably altered our lives. In many houses these
gadgets
 are in
superior
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 position, being able to control lots of activities. In the following paragraphs, I will explore the rationale for
benefits
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the benefits
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 of information technology,
as well as
 proffer justification for them. Regarding drawbacks which
electronical
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electronic
 devices brought us, humans, there are some reasons. One supportive claim is that mobile
gadgets
 lead to insecure, 'disconnected'
people
. As a case in point, my parents used to talk to their
neighbors
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 face to face in order to get to know them,
whereas
 my sister can find lots of friends online without any need to leave home.
Such
 changes lead to
syhnesss
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shyness
,
insecureness
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insecurity
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, and
introvert
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people
. More
specificially
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specifically
, the usage of social media and
electronical
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electronic
 devices cause troubles in society by separating every individual from each other.
However
, I agree that
achievments
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achievements
achievement
 in
technological
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the technological
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 industry benefit humans more than they
does
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viseversa
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vice versa
vise versa
vice-versa
. To my mind, the most glaring supportive reason is the multitask provided by
gadgets
. As an illustration,
people
 had to memorise the
routs
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 in order to get somewhere in the city,
whereas
 now they are able to use GPS, which can almost find any place in the world and display the quickest way. Or if you need to know
weather
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 forecast, there is no need to check newspapers or television; all you need to perform is to check your phone. Of course, its
ubiquouty
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ubiquity
 causes problems in society
,
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 but
also
 benefits it.
For instance
, one can easily learn about
different
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a different
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 country's
culture
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cultures
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 by reading about
it
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them
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 on the internet or finding new
acquintances
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acquaintances
 who live in that country. Another reason is that technologies can perform tasks
human
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a human
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 cannot.
For example
, machines can produce thousands of papers a day,
while
people
 obviously are not capable of doing so. To be specific,
technology
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technological
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achievments
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achievements
 made our lives easier. In sum, I maintain that
although
 there are some disadvantages which
electronical
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electronic
gadgets
 bring, their advantages certainly outweigh them. In the future, I sincerely wish that humans will find viable solutions for these drawbacks and will
further
 improve information technologies
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