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The Graph shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kindom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The Graph shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kindom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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The line graph illustrates the rate of
carbon
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dioxide
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 production per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal which were produced over 40 years from 1967 to 2007. Units are measured in metric
tonnes
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.
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, the average of
carbon
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dioxide
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 in the United Kingdom and Sweden declined over the period given,
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 in Italy and Portugal, it climbed. Over the given duration the United Kingdom had the highest emission of
carbon
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dioxide
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. On the one hand, the amount of
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dioxide
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emmited
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emitted
 in the UK started at around 11
tonnes
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 and it slightly decreased to about 9
tonnes
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 in the
last
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 year.
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, in
Sweden
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 it began at approximately 9 metric
tones
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tonnes
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 and
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 peaked at about over 10
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1977
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 before falling dramatically to almost 6 metric
tonnes
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 in the final year.
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, in
Italy
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Italy,
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 the production of CO2 increased from just above 4 to just below 8 metric
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, in Portugal it
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peaked
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 at roughly 1 in 1967 and jumped to nearly 6 in 2007.
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