1. Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures ?

It is typically said that
today
's
youngster
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are pressurized by academic, social and commercial problems.
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essay will discuss the reasons
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these problems and provide certain measures to relieve the obstacles. I believe that young people must be preserved from growing
pressures
.
Children
have many academic
pressures
.
Today
's kid isn'
t
contesting with the child next door or even of one's city or nation. He is competing with
kid
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of the global village. The huge planet Earth of
past
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the past
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is
little
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well-linked global village of
today
.
Parents
would like their
children
to be perfect in every field.
Children
are sent to the best schools, where school bag is heavier than the child himself by
parents
. Even after school
hours
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they have private courses.
Children
aren'
t
given time to show their hidden abilities. And
also
they have many social problems and commercial
pressures
. Socially, the
children
of
today
are in a big dilemma. They would like to preserve the global culture that their
parents
don'
t
want. Every now and
then
this
makes them against their
parents
' rules. They
also
come across peer
pressures
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.
This
peer pressure can help the increasing stress and strain on
children
. When they see many modern items
such
as computers, phones
and
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etc with friends, they would like to purchase them. If they don'
t
buy them, they will be stressed.
Cure
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The cure
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isn'
t
basic. Youngsters have to be handled with great care.
Children
should be given time and love by their
parents
. Schools and teachers have the biggest onus.They should try to show the best in every child and teach their
children
competition and cooperation. They should teach that goal of
contest
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shouldn'
t
be to win and to win with modesty and lose with grace. Summing up, there is no suspicion that the youngsters of
today
are encountering so many
pressures
, but measures should be taken on a war footing to protect their innocent childhood.
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