rich countries should aallow jobs for skilled and knowlegeable employers who are from poor coutries. Do you agree or disagree.

Nowadays it is extremely clear there is a deep gap between poor and rich
countries
.
Hence
,
this
could be demonstrated by the general level of culture, both for hard and soft skills, which could
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as a parameter of a nation's well-being. I believe that rich
states
should help
people
from the less fortunate ones, mainly starting from assumptions.
First,
I claim the fact that poor
people
should have the same possibilities as individuals from rich
countries
. Obviously, the road to happiness is quite
hardest
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for the first cluster, but,
on the other hand
, it could be facilitated by opportunities given by those who work in a healthy state. In fact, rich workplaces should hire employers from poor
states
to share a part of wellness and third-world
countries
' prosperity.
As a result
,
this
choice could stimulate other
countries
to adopt the same strategy and stimulate all the
states
to reduce the inferiority of poor ones as well.
Furthermore
, rich
countries
should recruit able workers from poor
states
to incentivise studies in these
countries
.
Therefore
,
people
who move to first-world
states
should be considered a master of their co-nationals and an example to follow. In poor minds, these
people
have had courage enough to move from their birthplace and change their conditions.
Consequently
, they could be imitated to escape from poor conditions and bad education possibilities. In conclusion, in my
opinion
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rich
states
should help
states
with more difficulties. In
this
way, the gap between the wealthy and the poor will be reduced and
also
the
last
countries
will have the possibility to improve global wellness.
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