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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #professionals #doctors #engineers #work #country
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Some people opine that professionals
professions
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 who get
the
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 education in one
country
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 can be employed in the same
country
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.
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 they are trained and get
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 education, they are not supposed to be obligated to
work
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 in the
country
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 where they studied. In my point of view, I agree that they have the choices to
work
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 in the
country
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 where they want to. To start with,
the
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professions
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 who
work
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 as
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doctor
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doctors
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 and
engineer
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engineers
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, are
the
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important
professions
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 since they are expected to serve for
community
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the community
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 as
the
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they
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 return
for
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 the
country
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 where they study.
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, some of them have a dream to
work
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 overseas,
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 they will get hate-speech from the citizen because they are regarded as the person who do not how to
thankful
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be thankful
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 for the
country
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 they studied.
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, from my
friend
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friend's
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 experience who graduated as a
doctor
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,
she
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wanted to study abroad to continue her
specialize
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 after getting her medical bachelor but her dream cannot
to
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be carried out since her
bachelor
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bachelor's
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 university wanted her to
work
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 as
resident
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a resident
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doctor
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in
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at
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university
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a university
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 hospital.
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, the
professions
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 like
doctor
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,
engineer
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engineering
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, and others with relates to the profession have
a
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different
dream
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dreams
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 about what they want to do in the future.
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, they want to expand their abilities to help people in other countries and some of them have the opinion to help undeveloped countries as in
Africa
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African
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 countries.
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, the article which I read on the internet explained that there were
doctor
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 communities for giving
a
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free treatment to Zimbabwe inhabitants.
To sum up
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, professional
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professions
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 should not be restricted from their intention to
work
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 overseas since some of them have
a
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 motivation to
work
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 overseas for helping people around the world.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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