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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now "one big traffic jam" How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people form using their cars?

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Well , there is no doubt
about
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that in
recent
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 few decades, traffic jam is
main
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 problem as
number
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 of
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the car
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car
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are increase
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 because
people
 feel more comfortable and convenient . Personally ,
i
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believes
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 that
this
 statement is fully true ,
however
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 government have to
taken
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 action to reduce
this
. To commence with
first
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 and foremost point that
people
 give more preferences to their own
car
instead
 of public transport system needless to say , they can
easy
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 afford it with numerous bank loan services and with
installment
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 ways which
is
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 very popular these days .
Apart from
this
 , who so ever not have
any
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 job ,
they
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can
easy
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 start their
car
 taxes business with little
paper work
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,
for example
 , in India
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people
 can
easyily
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easily
 start their work in taxes business .
Hence
 , in ,fact in
this
 nation taxes owner are more as compared to other countries . Unless the government can not takes action ,it would not be controlled .
firstly
, lawmakers have to ban instalment ways to buy new cars , so that middle
people
 can avoid
to buy
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these
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car
 .
Moreover
, authorities have to increase tax on purchasing cars ,as a result ,
taffic
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traffic
 jam issues
solved
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 , meanwhile , they have to provide the best public transport system .
Then
 ,
people
 feel that they can easily afford their tickets and feel safe
while
 travelling. All in all , it is very head to ignore that nowadays
people
 can easily afford a new
car
 ,
nevertheless
, with the help
to
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government
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 it should be controlled by applying
huge
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a huge
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 tax on it
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