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Some people believe they should keep all the money they have earned and should not pay tax to the state.Do you agree or disagree?

#people #money #tax
I disagree those
people
 should not be demanded to pay state fees.From the
taxes
 it acquires, the
government
manager
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this
 country.Only
people
 who earn more than a particular lowest level are subject to taxation.
Tax
 payment is a moral duty for ourselves. The funds raised by the
government
 are used to support public works projects, fundamental services for residents, the process of prisons and the military,
between
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 many other activities.
According to the
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The
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 saying "
taxes
 run a country"is true.
Consequently
, it is significant for
government
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the government
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 to control taxation. We will review the causes
why
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of why
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people
 disagree
to
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with
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 paying
taxes
.Their disagreement with how successfully the
government
 treats them is the main reason.They bring the
government
 to concerns like a lack
infrastructure
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of infrastructure
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, poverty and unemployment,
also
 they are incorrect in order
tax
 money is taken in everywhere in one way or another.
However
,
developed
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in developed
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 parts of
world
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the world
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, when individuals are more grateful
with
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for
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 how their
governments
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government's
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 income they might be
more
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happier to pay
taxes
due to
 increased satisfaction
from
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with
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government's
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the government's
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 functioning,
people
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and people
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 may be willing to pay revenue.The
tax
 system itself is a
further
 source of unhappiness.The complexity of the
tax
 system frequently discourages
people
 from paying
taxes
.
Additionaly
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Additionally
,it had
impression
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the impression
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 that
tax
 slabs were unfair and rates were high.
Therefore
, they believe that engaging in
tax
 avoidance or
tax
 evasion is not unethical. The duration of revenue a nation generates can be significantly impacted by
taxes
evasi
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evasion
.
However
,it is
also
 desirable that the
government
 develop a fair
tax
 system and inform the populace of the places where
taxes
 are being misapplied. In conclusion,
i
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 will state it again:it is everyone's responsibility to pay
taxes
 and is every
government
's responsibility to use those
taxes
 wisely.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contribute
  • welfare
  • public services
  • progressive taxation
  • distribution of wealth
  • civic duty
  • social cohesion
  • tax evasion
  • economic disparities
  • social unrest
  • individual rights
  • societal responsibilities
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