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Band 4.5

Some people believe they should keep all the money they have earned and should not pay tax to the state.Do you agree or disagree?

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I disagree those
people
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 should not be demanded to pay state fees.From the
taxes
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 it acquires, the
government
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manager
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this
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 country.Only
people
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 who earn more than a particular lowest level are subject to taxation.
Tax
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 payment is a moral duty for ourselves. The funds raised by the
government
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 are used to support public works projects, fundamental services for residents, the process of prisons and the military,
between
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among
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 many other activities.
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According to the
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The
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 saying "
taxes
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 run a country"is true.
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, it is significant for
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government
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the government
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 to control taxation. We will review the causes
why
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of why
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people
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 disagree
to
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with
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 paying
taxes
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.Their disagreement with how successfully the
government
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 treats them is the main reason.They bring the
government
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 to concerns like a lack
infrastructure
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of infrastructure
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, poverty and unemployment,
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 they are incorrect in order
tax
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 money is taken in everywhere in one way or another.
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,
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in developed
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 parts of
world
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the world
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, when individuals are more grateful
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for
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 how their
governments
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government's
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 income they might be
more
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apply
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happier to pay
taxes
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due to
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 increased satisfaction
from
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with
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government's
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the government's
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 functioning,
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people
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and people
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 may be willing to pay revenue.The
tax
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 system itself is a
further
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 source of unhappiness.The complexity of the
tax
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 system frequently discourages
people
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 from paying
taxes
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.
Additionaly
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Additionally
,it had
impression
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the impression
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 that
tax
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 slabs were unfair and rates were high.
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, they believe that engaging in
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 avoidance or
tax
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 evasion is not unethical. The duration of revenue a nation generates can be significantly impacted by
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evasi
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evasion
.
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,it is
also
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 desirable that the
government
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 develop a fair
tax
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 system and inform the populace of the places where
taxes
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 are being misapplied. In conclusion,
i
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 will state it again:it is everyone's responsibility to pay
taxes
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 and is every
government
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's responsibility to use those
taxes
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 wisely.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contribute
  • welfare
  • public services
  • progressive taxation
  • distribution of wealth
  • civic duty
  • social cohesion
  • tax evasion
  • economic disparities
  • social unrest
  • individual rights
  • societal responsibilities
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