The diagram below shows how salt is removed from seawater to make it drinkable. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how salt is removed from seawater to make it drinkable. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates a cyclical process where it is explained as an industrial method to purify
salt
water
, making it drinkable.
Overall
, the process is composed of two stages, starting with the extraction of
water
from the
sea
and ending with drinkable
water
stored ready for human consumption. Looking at the first step,
salt
water
is removed from the
sea
, experiencing a pretreatment filter, where
water
may be forced to go through the membrane at high pressure or could be returned to the
sea
via filter backwash. When
water
passes through the membrane, impurities and
salt
are removed from the
water
molecules, which go to the next step.
However
, seawater concentrate with high rates of impurities and
salt
is returned to the
sea
. During the second step,
water
experiences a post-treatment where it is combined with lime, chlorine and fluoride to be
then
stored, ready for consumption.
Finally
, when drinkable
water
is required, it is integrated into the
water
supply system.
This
process is cyclical, removing
salt
water
from the
sea
when it is demanded and purifying it.
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