It is no longer necessary that animals should be slaughtered and made into either human foodstuffs or non-foodstuffs, such as fur and medicine. Do you agree or disagree?

Humans are said to be the most selfish living beings on the planet.
While
all creature has the right to live freely, people usually kill them to satisfy their need which is unjustified in most cases.
This
process of killing the animals needs to be banned before the results become irreversible and individuals will have nothing despite regrets. I completely agree that slaughtering animals should be prohibited by all means.
Firstly
, what human wants
is being increasing
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day by day which sometimes get fulfilled at the cost of
life
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of other living being.
For example
, hens are nowadays being farmed in order to slaughter them for food.
This
is not the only case many other species are being cultivated for food and demand is
ever rising
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. Certainly, it is true to
said
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that soon animals will be treated
same
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as crops.
Also
, these are not
being
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just
the
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source of food but
also
used for many other purposes like making carpets.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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