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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
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The map illustrates, the new possible plan for a
supermarket
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 (s) in the town of Garlsdon.
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, the population of
garlsdon
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Carlson
 is 65000. There are 3 main villages situated on the outskirt of the city.
Hindon
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, bransdon, and cransdon. Both rural and urban people can access the new
supermarket
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 easily.
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 with, the population of
Hindon
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 is 10000.
Supermarket
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 One will construct close to
Hindon
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village
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. There is a main road, that connects
Hindon
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 and industry.
Supermarket
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 one is situated on the left side of the main road. There is a railway line passing from Hindom
village
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 and passes near
Supermarket
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Two
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 and ends in Cransdom
village
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. The citizen in Carnsdom
village
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 is 29000. For them
Supermarket
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Two
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 is near. The residence in
bransdom
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village
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 is 15000. There is a main road connecting
supermarket
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Two
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 and
bransdom
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random
. Housing is situated on the north and south sides of
Supermarket
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Two
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.
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,
Supermarket
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two
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Two
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 is the biggest one. Because housing, industry, and main villages are situated around
this
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words supermarket, hindon, village, two with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Congestion
  • Economic benefits
  • Environmental impact
  • Foot traffic
  • Green space
  • Job creation
  • Local property values
  • Parking availability
  • Pollution
  • Proximity
  • Public transportation
  • Sustainability
  • Traffic patterns
  • Residential areas
  • Shopping convenience
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