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Classroom attendance at universities should be optional. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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It is said that
students
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 do not need to attend
at
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universities
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 every
day
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. They should go to the
lessons
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 when they want. I am completely certain that
students
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 ought to attend to their
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study
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studies
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.
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However
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 whether they do not go to the course they do not learn anything
with
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 their specific subjects effectively. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss why classroom attendance is more important than optional and provide relevant examples from my experience. Nowadays, a majority of
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young people
study
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 at
universities
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 where they want around the world. There are famous
universities
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 in the world, which are all
of
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facilities
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the facilities
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in
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so as to
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for
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youngs
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young
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.
Students
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 who
study
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 at
universities
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 want to educate professionals.
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, well-experienced teachers instruct them
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.
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, If a student participates
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lessons
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 on time every
day
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 her or his knowledge improves
day
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 by
day
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. It helps
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this student
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these students
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 to be professional staff in the future one
day
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 those who participate
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lessons
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 of the
universities
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 learn more things
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than
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 they desire.
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, others think that
students
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 should be free in order to attend the
lessons
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.
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, classroom attendance ought not to be compulsory,
therefore
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 they go to the courses when they want.
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, if
students
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 participate
to
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 their
lessons
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 when they desire they cannot educate effectively. They cannot improve their skills at all.
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, I knew someone who did not participate
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 lesson on time. He went to university when he wanted. After he hardly graduated
his
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study
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 because of not participating
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 course.
As a
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result
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 he could not find a job anywhere due not to
enough
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having enough
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 knowledge
with
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 his specialist.
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 every student should participate
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lessons
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 on time. It is beneficial for their future career.
To conclude
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, it is argued that the
lessons
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 of the
universities
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 should not
compulsory
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.
Students
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 participate
the
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lessons
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 if they want. In my opinion, all of the young people who want to learn accurately
they
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have to be
classroom
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a classroom
the classroom
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. I have tried to answer correctly and provided relevant examples from my experience.

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