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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that in many cities around the world, there are constant traffic jams. How true you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from owning cars?

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Many
people
 say that the increasing number of car owners has resulted in heavy
traffic
 jams in many
cities
 across the world. In
this
 essay, I will discuss
this
 situation and explain what
governments
 should do to prevent
people
 from buying their own cars. In my opinion, there is no doubt that car
traffic
 is a serious problem
governments
 have recently been dealing with, especially in large
cities
.
This
 is because the vast majority of the infrastructure projects on public
transportation
 improvement have not kept up with the quick growth of
cities
, leading
people
 to have their own vehicles. In London,
for example
, the roads are too narrow to support the number of vehicles, which results in heavy
traffic
 jams where drivers spend hours driving a few kilometres.
As a result
,
traffic
 might be the greatest issue
that is
 simultaneously happening in large
cities
, as most of them report it daily both in developed and developing countries. Having said that, the most effective measure that
governments
 can implement to solve
this
 problem is focusing on public
transportation
 improvements.
This
 means that, if the population had had access to high-quality
transportation
,
such
 as trains and buses, for a fair price and that could take them to remote locations, they would not have preferred to buy their own cars.
For instance
, there are model
cities
 where public
transportation
 works outstandingly, so most of the residents do not have a car.
Therefore
,
it is clear that
 if government invest more in
transportation
 infrastructure,
people
 will be discouraged from owning cars.
To sum up
, it is obvious that many large
cities
 around the world have been facing extremely heavy
traffic
 jams, which could be tackled if
governments
 start to turn their attention to investments in projects to improve public
transportation
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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