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In most countries the number of people owning their own cars is on the rise. Is this a pasitive or negative development?

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Owning a
pasonal
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personal
cars
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 can be
one
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 and the most significant indication of
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the develapment
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develapment
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development
 of the country.
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 of
industrialization
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industrialization,
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 we can see
massive
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a massive
the massive
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 number of
cars
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 In the
cites
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cities
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 recently, From my point of view,
this
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 situation can have both negative and positive
impact
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impacts
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 on not only individuals
,
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but
also
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government
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the government
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. To commence with, the first positive side, I can say that having
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a personol
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personol
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personal
car
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 can be considered safe and sound, especially for women. As we realise,
the
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crowded places especially public transport are
one
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 of the best places for psychopaths to commit sexual harassment and
abusement
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.
Unfortunately
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Unfortunately,
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 nowadays
this
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 embarrassing and graceful crime happens to men as well. That's the reason why I see owning a
car
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 as the best solution
of
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preventing to these behaviors.
In addition
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,
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If
one
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 has their own
car
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, it's beneficial for these to save their time. Especially when it’s time to go to work and be back home.
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, their itineraries don't always match the way you want to travel.
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result
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result,
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 you have to travel more way
that
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than
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 you
dant
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don't
 desire, to reach your destination. It's not the only point to
make
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making
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 you wait on the bus,
bublic
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public
transports
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transport
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 have too many stops in order to pick people up
trom
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from
 different point of the itinerary. All these reasons are irritating for a person that works too many hours and rests less, Despite all these positive sides increasing the number of
cars
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 has negative impacts as well.
Such
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 as traffic congestion and
car
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 crashes.
One
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 of the greatest
problem
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problems
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 of
the
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apply
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modern life is that people suffer a lot is staying in heavy traffic for hours. Its primary reason is
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the arise
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arise
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rise
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of
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in
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 the number of
cars
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, To my understanding it’s much governmental problem
more
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apply
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than being
individual
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individual one
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.
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, all these ideas, as it becomes easier to have a
car
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,
it
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brought positivity and negativity to people's
life
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lives
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. We should be able to
contrel
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control
 the situation
accordingly
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.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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