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Some people think that social networking sites have a huge negative impact on botj individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #sites #impact #botj #individuals #society
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Using networking
sites
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 has been always giving a basis for lengthy debates. In fact, I think that using them has both negative and positive effects for individuals and society
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simultaneously
. On the one hand, social networking
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 impact negatively. For one, the more
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 use networking
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, the more they may lose their health fastly. It might bring not only poor eyesight
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stress, overthinking and feeling blue regularly. Another fundamental reason has to do with the fact that
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 have not been doing
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 conversations,
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 talks with their relatives and colleagues for many years. With that in
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people
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 prefer living alone,
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 a consequence
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, it might bring damage to society.
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, social networking
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 offer major advantages.
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, since we live in a technological century,
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 might earn more money from
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 thanks to networking
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straighforwardly
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straightforwardly
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, it is more
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chating
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chatting
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 others via social media even
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 are far from us. On top of that, if
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 want to know about some information, they should just surf the internet, access the network and find that information.
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, it is undeniable that social networking
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 may bring some negative impacts, that said, it has beneficial
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sights
 to considering its role in developing
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both society and
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lifesytle
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lifestyles
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