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Some people claim that it is acceptable to use animals in medical research for the benefit of human beings, while others are give that it is wrong. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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It is often argued by
few
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 masses claim that it is bearable to utilise
animals
 in medical investigation for the advantage of people.
However
, others declare that it is incorrect.
This
 essay will discuss both
view
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 as far as I am concerned I am in favour of
latter
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 notion. To commence with, some individuals argue that it is wrong to
use
animals
 in medical research for the benefit of
persons
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. To Explain it, because
animals
 have
same
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 DNA (deoxyribonucleic acid) as humans so, doctors and scientists
use
 pets for their
researches
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.
For instance
, in many
tests
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 creatures
such
 as dogs, rats etc are used by removing their organs to discovery.
Furthermore
, in checking
of
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drugs mice are considered
as
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human beings in research
subject
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 in many ways.
Hence
, it is true that nearly every medical in the
last
 100 years has resulted directly from
investigation
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investigations
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 using
animals
.
In addition
to
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, few people claim that it is acceptable to
use
 rodents in medical experiments for the benefit of human beings.
In other words
, I believe that the lives of all creatures should be respected and
persons
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people
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 have no right to
suffer
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animals
 for their own
benefits
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. Government should invest in
development
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 of alternative methods rather than using invertebrates.
For example
, a software program can be developed to investigate
on
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medicines, it will avoid killing critters for investigation.
Therefore
, it is totally wrong to
use
 creatures and play with their lives just for
humans
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humans'
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 advantage. In conclusion, beasts are
great
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 source of natural resources to mankind and their conservation serves as a necessary reminder, in order to sustain a healthy ecosystem.
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