The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and the amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and the amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
The line graphs below give information about the
percentage
of households with electrical devices and the number of hours of people doing housework per week in one country from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
, more and more households start using different kinds of electrical devices including washing
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machines
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,
refrigerator
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, and vacuum
cleaner
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. We can see since 1920 the
percentage
rose gradually until 2019.
By contrast
, the hours of housework per week in
household
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stably decreased.
It is clear that
in 1920, a great number of families start using
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, and the
percentage
have a dramatic increase
by
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90% in the 40 years period. The
percentage
of washing
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and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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went up slowly from nearly 40% to 70% in 1960,
however
, the
percentage
of vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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rapidly rose up and reach almost the same level as
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refrigerator
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.
On the other hand
,
according to
the line graph, people spent less and less time
to clean
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their
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. From 50% to around 10% between 1920 and 2019.
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