The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and the amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

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The line graphs below give information about the

percentage

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of households with electrical devices and the number of hours of people doing housework per week in one country from 1920 to 2019.

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, more and more households start using different kinds of electrical devices including washing

machine

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machines

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refrigerator

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, and vacuum

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. We can see since 1920 the

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rose gradually until 2019.

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, the hours of housework per week in

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stably decreased.

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in 1920, a great number of families start using

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, and the

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have a dramatic increase

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90% in the 40 years period. The

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of washing

machine

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machines

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and vacuum

cleaner

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cleaners

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went up slowly from nearly 40% to 70% in 1960,

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, the

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of vacuum

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cleaners

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rapidly rose up and reach almost the same level as

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a refrigerator

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refrigerator

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refrigerators

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according to

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the line graph, people spent less and less time

to clean

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their

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. From 50% to around 10% between 1920 and 2019.

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Single idea per paragraph

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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and the amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

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