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Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people, while others believe that the purpose of museums is to educate. Discuss both views and give you own opinion.

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People
 have different views about the roles and functions of
museums
.
While
 netizens think that
museums
 should be interesting places to entertain
people
, I believe the
museum
's better purpose is to educate.
This
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duscuss
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discuss
 that idea. On the one hand, it can be argued that the main role of a
museum
 is to entertain.
Firstly
, the
museum
 is a place that attracts many tourists, and the purpose of the
museum
 is to display interesting objects that young
people
 will want to see.
For example
, my friends had a visit
to
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the
museum
 in Hai Phong
city
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, they were interested because the decoration there is very suitable for young
people
.
Secondly
, the average visitor may become bored if they
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 to read or listen to too much educational content, so
museums
 often put more of an emphasis on enjoyment rather than learning.
On the other hand
,
museum
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 plays a significant role in providing knowledge about history, art, science and culture to young
people
.
Therefore
,we need to employ guides to explain
these knowledge
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 in a more efficient way rather than showing just an exhibition to visitors.
As a result
,
people
 can access information more easily, and broaden their understanding
while
 having fun inside the
museum
. In
this
 way, the main purpose of the
museum
 is to educate
people
 about the history of interesting collections of objects of great cultural or historical value. In conclusion, I firmly believe that not only
museums
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 have a positive impact on learning and educating young
people
, but the role of
museums
 in attracting
people
 is undeniable.
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