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write an email about the advantages and drawbacks of open-door policy at Tip Top Trading?

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Dear
Mr
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. Louis, I am
Anna
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 who is responsible for Human Resources at Tip Top Trading
Company
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. Today, I am writing
this
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 email to give you the advantages and drawbacks of the
open-door
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policy
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 at our
company
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.
Firstly
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,
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open-door
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an open-door
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policy
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 helps to improve strong relationships with leadership. Because not only
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.
Anna
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- Sales Department, but
also
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 all employees know that their leadership is available to listen to them,
then
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 their bond with the boss is strengthened.
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, when
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.
Anna
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 is a new employee at our
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, the fact that there is always someone, especially a boss to support her in times of need prevents her from feeling excluded at work.
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,
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 improving relationships, it helps effective
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. Because they can openly discuss their
issues
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 with
management
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.
This
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 one-on-one type of meeting without any barrier helps them to effectively communicate
work related
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issues
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.
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, about the big
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 of
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. Lime,
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.
Anna
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 should discuss their problems and solutions directly with
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.
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 to limit some mistakes in
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 big order.
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, having open communication through an
open-door
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policy
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 creates a culture of cooperation and mutual trust. Employees feel
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important when they are given access to discuss their matters with leadership. Their attitude towards work is improved and they become more productive and efficient.
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, through
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 type of meetings,
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Ms.
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Anna
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 could understand the details of products and bring to the
company
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 many potential customers.
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, there are many drawbacks
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open-door
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an open-door
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policy
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. It will reduce
productivity
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the productivity
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 of
management
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Ms.
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Anna
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 will ask the trivial
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 which end up wasting
precious
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 time of
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Mr.
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Paul
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.
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,
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Mr.
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Paul
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 is not able to finish his tasks and responsibilities on time which ultimately
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 his productivity.
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,
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.
Anna
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 who becomes overly reliant on
management
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 may become reluctant to make decisions or deal with
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 on her own without first consulting
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.
Paul
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. In conclusion, in my opinion, Tip Top Trading
company
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 is changing at a fast pace and there is an immense need for open communication between employees and
management
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. But the benefits of
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open-door
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an open-door
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policy
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 are more significant than the disadvantages.
Therefore
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, our
company
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 should adopt
this
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policy
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 after analyzing what suits its purpose and goal. Thank you for your time and consideration, I look forward to hearing from you. Best regards,
Anna
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