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The maps below show the development of a seaside village between 1995 to present.

The maps below show the development of a seaside village between 1995 to present.
#maps #show #development #village
Presented for consideration are two maps, highlighting the changes which took place in a seaside suburb between 1995 and
present
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the present
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. From an
overall
 perspective,
this
costal
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coastal
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 town was inclined to turn into
metropolitan
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a metropolitan
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 area for tourism
purpose
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purposes
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 with many noticeable changes over the sea. It is clear to observe that more commercial zone
are
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is
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 constructed to
fullfill
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fulfil
this
 demand. In the northern half of the map, the residential area expanded northwest by constructing 2 more homes following on, the path
lie
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lies
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 to the west of housing is expanded. In regards to the farmland, the infrastructure was modernized by converting green space into
the
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a
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 large golf course with
large
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a large
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 two tennis
center
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centre
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 to the south. In the
vicnity
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vicinity
 of the town
center
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centre
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 in the south
of
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apply
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shops and fish
market
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markets
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 were demolished and replaced with tourist development
such
 as lavish restaurants and apartments with
the
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a
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 sea view. There
also
 used to be a fishing port outside the sea in 1995. A final point of interest is that entertainment amenities remained untouched, with the hotel
was
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being
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 extended by adding
parking
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a parking
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 area for inhabitants.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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