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Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go. Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter:  Say why you would like to go on the trip  Suggest what you could do to help during the trip  Ask other questions about the trip

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter to show my gratitude
toward
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 the opportunity provided by you that parents can come with the school
trip
 . I want to express my deep interest
to
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this
trip
 because it will be a new experience for me . I want to go on
this
trip
 because I will get
a
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plenty of time to spend with my children and I can take care of them during
this
trip
.
Secondly
,
to explore
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 different
country
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countries
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 would be magnificent ,
this
 will help me to connect with different
culture
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,
religion
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 and beliefs
also
 I will learn
alot
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a lot
 from
this
trip
 which I can implement in my life . I have great experience in coordination and organizing things and
also
 better communication added
positive
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 attitude
in
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 my personality
this
 way , I am able to help
another
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 staff to save their time and energy. I
also
 want to know about the exact date of
this
trip
 and the price of the tickets. I am looking forward to hearing from you Yours faithfully, Tom
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logical structure
Provide a clearer structure by introducing paragraphs for each main point you wish to discuss. This helps in maintaining a logical flow and makes your letter easier to follow.
logical structure
Utilize linking words and transitions more effectively to better connect your ideas and paragraphs.
greeting and closing
Ensure your letter has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Starting with a greeting, introducing your purpose in the first paragraph, developing your points in the body, and finishing with a closing statement.
single idea per paragraph
Focus on one main idea per paragraph to ensure clarity and cohesion. This will make your letter more organized and impactful.
complete response
Fully address all aspects of the task. Make sure to answer all questions and cover all points requested in the prompt to fully satisfy the task requirement.
suitable writing tone
Maintain a consistent and appropriate tone throughout the letter. Being mindful of the formal context, consider adjusting the tone to be more consistently formal or polite as required.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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